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PostSubject: Voices of Riders--OOC   Tue Aug 11, 2009 3:16 pm

Post your ideas, constructive criticism, and just anything in general pertaining to the story line 'The World of Drakonia' here. Thanks!!!!

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Tue Aug 11, 2009 3:24 pm

OK, here goes some suggestions I have. Now, bear in mind, this is just my suggestions and opinions.

I LOVE the concept of this story. Here's a couple of things to keep in mind to make it even more believable:

Most dragons are born female with like one in five or six being male. This helps in two ways.
1) It keeps the males from fighting with each other since there are enough females to go around. Bull dragons, with or without riders, will fight another bull for territory when it's mating season and with all that testosterone in the air, it can lead to some nasty fights among the dragons.
2) With the ratio of five or six females to one male helps insure the dragon population will continue to grow at a rate that isn't too fast or too slow.

When you create the rules for this world, make sure you explain the dragons aren't to be so powerful they can't be defeated. Even by other dragons. All creatures, mythical or not, have weaknesses. Be sure you spell out, in no uncertain circumstances, will God-moding with dragons be permitted. While it states so in our site rules, it's imperitive you include it again in this particular thread. It's too easy for someone to think they can come in and be dragon supreme because they are such powerful creatures and have few enemies that CAN defeat them.

While the idea behind the Lizonians taking human females to insure the species is not too far of a stretch, it would mean that eventually they would breed the lizard out of them without having Lizonian females they could breed with. With each generation the Lizonians took human females to breed with they would reduce the Lizonian gene in their DNA and eventually you will end up with all humans once more. I think that particular part needs some more thinking.

With the above in mind, I don't want to see a thread where a main character is constantly abused or has been abused by these creatures and dwells on it all the time. It's OK to mention it in the story, but to make a character strictly on that basis won't fly very well. While it's inevitable to totally omit it from the story, it's not good to dwell on it over and over and over. Remember, we come here to escape reality and write fantastical stories by allowing ourselves to write as strong willed, bright minded characters that aren't push overs.

I like the idea of mostly men being the riders with a few select females being riders while the human females tend to the dragons eggs while they are out doing what ever it is dragons do.

Make sure you create a new topic for character submission so they don't get lost in any conversation or explanation of the land and setting.

This has the potential of being a wonderful story telling thread but I would stray from the "Play-By-Post" role playing style that can infect good story threads.

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Tue Aug 11, 2009 3:27 pm

Thank you, RP. Very much. Now, what is Play-by-Post? And, I will make the corrections in the introduction. Very Happy

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Tue Aug 11, 2009 3:30 pm

Play-By-Post6 is more or less roleplaying without the board in front of you. In other words, instead of doing more story telling you do more action and wait for the next person in line to post to write a response.

In story telling posts, you can take some minor liberties with the other persons character to help move the story along as well as write sme posts that are more than just dialogue between characters. In fact, some posts don't have to have dialogue at all. It can be some back story insight or delving into the emotions and mind of the character you're writing for to give the readers a better understanding of why they are the way they are.

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Tue Aug 11, 2009 3:38 pm

Okayk, thank you. I have edited my introduction for the story, please check it out and let me know if it's okay. Very Happy

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Tue Aug 11, 2009 3:45 pm

Good start!

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Tue Aug 11, 2009 3:50 pm

I've also revised my first post. Hope it works. I'll add another post hopefully tonight. You really think it's good?

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Tue Aug 11, 2009 3:55 pm

I have few things to add to RP's assesment. I think the story line has a lot of potential and I too like the concept. It is a very good start to what looks like a promising thread. Keep up the good work.
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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Tue Aug 11, 2009 3:58 pm

Thank you, both of you. Laughing As I have said before, I want and accept any and all input from you guys. This is new to me so, if I mess up, tell me. Also, would anyone have any pics that would go along with this world? If so, go ahead and add them, I don't mind. If I don't think they fit, I'll say so. LOL

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Tue Aug 11, 2009 4:00 pm

Excellent. Lac and I may have some that fit very well.

I've already got a character I'm thinking of. A couple actually.

Both of them male. I've never played a male as my main character but I think I will for this thread.

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Tue Aug 11, 2009 4:03 pm

Cool, I can't wait. Oh by the way, I forgot to put in here. JackRose3 is also a part of the creation of this thread. I just want to make sure that he gets credit too as he should.

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Tue Aug 11, 2009 4:12 pm

I too have a character in mind for this thread. And as RP said we have many pics that I think will fit in nicely I think.
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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Wed Aug 12, 2009 9:34 pm

I've been making corrections in the intro. Would welcome any and all advice still. Also, is there any way to make sure that Jackrose3 gets partial credit for World of Drakonia. He played an important part in the idea and if this storyline takes off, I want to make sure that he is also known as the author along with myself.

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Thu Aug 13, 2009 3:16 pm

Oh bloody hell....


LOL


Had a good post alll ready to go and you went and posted another post....

AAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH


Now I gotta rethink this....

bugger...

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Thu Aug 13, 2009 3:19 pm

Should I wait for another post from you before I post?

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Thu Aug 13, 2009 3:21 pm

I am sooo sorry. No, go ahead. I just wanted to get Shiloh's journey under way. Sorry.

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Thu Aug 13, 2009 3:22 pm

LOL

No prob. Just wanted to make sure before I went to post again.

Is it still dark out or has the sun come up now?

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Thu Aug 13, 2009 3:23 pm

It would be late morning. Around 10:30 in the morning.

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Thu Aug 13, 2009 3:25 pm

K....just wondering since it was night when your first post happened I just wanted to make sure I didn't screw it up and I was about to but I can easily correct it.

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Thu Aug 13, 2009 3:26 pm

[size=18]Oh, yea you're right. Sorry, missed that little tidbit. LOL /size]

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Thu Aug 13, 2009 9:30 pm

I have added sorcerers to the intro. Need some help on names and abilities. Will take any and all suggestions. LOL Need your input as well, Jackrose3 since your part maker of this story.

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Tue Aug 18, 2009 10:45 am

Another excellent post there, Sin. Tha'ts what I like to see, in depth character development as well as some story telling and background of who, what, when, where, how, and why.

YOU GO GIRL!!!!!

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Tue Aug 18, 2009 12:41 pm

Thank you, I'm learning here and enjoying every minute of it!!! Laughing

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Tue Aug 18, 2009 12:56 pm

We're all about opening the mind to all sorts of imaginary works! Don't hesitate one bit to write, write and write some more. There's no such thing as a post thtat's too long. THe more meat you give the readers to gnaw on, the more you captivate the audience and give fellow writers to work with.

You are doing a fantastic job and I can see your writing evolving in the most wonderful way!

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PostSubject: Re: Voices of Riders--OOC   Tue Aug 18, 2009 1:03 pm

*Wraps her arms around RP, hugging her close, sniffling herself*

Oh, thank you RP. It makes my heart soar to know that I make you proud. sunny

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